“老師以為我作文用 ChatGPT”

有個移民到英國的香港學生，說他老師看完他的作文後，以為他是用ChatGPT寫的。在我看來，原因之一可能是他在香港讀書時，被教的那一套是根據固定公式寫文章，而這種寫作風格，正是ChatGPT最善於的，所以他去外國後，被老師誤解。

那該如何跑贏ChatGPT？方法其實很多，以下面這段關於 Tudor Dynasty 文字為例，原文平鋪直敘地把這段歷史總結一遍，我的rewrite選擇先把焦點放在Tudor朝代的其中一位最聞名人物Anne Bolelyn，然後用“藤㨢瓜瓜㨢藤”的方法，把跟她相關的人物和事件逐一敘述，這樣就能避免 sound like ChatGPT。

原文

The Tudor Era (1485–1603) is one of the most interesting chapters in English history. Though relatively brief, this period was packed with dramatic change, defined by the reigns of five monarchs. Among them, the three Tudor siblings—Edward VI, Mary I, and Elizabeth I—stand out as pivotal figures. Their intertwined lives shaped the religious, political, and cultural identity of England, leaving an indelible mark on the nation's story.

It all began with Henry VII, the first Tudor king, who claimed the throne by defeating Richard III at the Battle of Bosworth Field. This victory not only ended the turbulent Wars of the Roses but also established the Tudor dynasty. Determined to strengthen the monarchy, Henry VII focused on financial stability and curbing the power of the nobility. His efforts laid the groundwork for his son, Henry VIII, whose reign would take the Tudor legacy to unprecedented heights.

My rewrite

Anne Boleyn would probably have regarded with a strange mixture of pride and disgust the way people are still using her name to make money 500 years after her untimely death. Film producers have continued making film after film on her, walking tours in London have capitalized on her notoriety, and even the Tower of London—the site of her execution—doesn't shy away from using her to draw foot traffic and tourist dollars.

It is just as well that this queen still holds fascination in our age of distraction, when the next TikTok video is just around the corner to take students' minds off studying. Thanks to Anne's mystique, they are more likely to be interested in the dynasty—the Tudor Era (1485–1603)—that saw her rise and downfall: the reigns of her husband (Henry VIII), her stepchildren (Edward VI and Mary I), and her daughter (Elizabeth I). Students will also learn that it was her husband's father who started the Tudor Dynasty after ending the Wars of the Roses, and that the dynasty ended with the death of her daughter.